This is the same scene but delivered through a converesation. Use different ways to present information so your book will be more interesting.
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Placement of the antecedent · Using fewer words · Moving the story forward · Putting emotion in writing · Placing description in the action or dialogue.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
If the heroine of your novel witnesses a robbery at a convenience store, we as readers want to know how she feels. We want to know if she’s scared to death. We want to know if her hands are trembling.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
Putting Description in the Action or Dialogue
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
Wordiness is a real no-no.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
description needs to be added to your story. The reader wants to feel like they’re in the same place the main character is.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
There has to be some kind of intrigue so they will be motivated to continue reading.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
Don’t forget to wrap up each and every subplot.
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Don’t let the subplot take over your story.
Mikie Joneshas quoted9 years ago
You have to devise a problem that the audience can’t figure out how the characters can overcome it.